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Chained by heartbreak,
Puzzled by looks,
Misguided by power, 
Stabbed by sadness.

Buried under work, 
Fooled by the temporary, 
Morphed by anger,
Shunned for differences.

Trapped by grief, 
Stung by results,
Blinded by fury, 
Weakened by words.

Everyone has flaws,
But flaws make us
Perfectly human.
This is a poem I wrote after a long day.

THIS IS OLD. LIKE, MY FIRST POEM ON THIS SITE. PLEASE, I'VE IMPROVED IN POERTY SO STOP FAVING THIS. ITS OLD ART, NOT SOMETHING IM PROUD OF. 
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AshenSnowflakes Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
*slowly raises hand* excuse me, I don't mean to sound mean... But you seem to on here persecuting people who ship things you don't like, and you see them as flaws... But in this poem you say flaws are part of being human... I'm a bit confused at your line of logic, Ms. Enemom.

But also, I think that this poem is beautifully written! You should be proud of this, no matter how old it is. It's a darn good "early on" poem, if you ask me... ^^
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Enemom Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, too bad I don't write poetry anymore. I'm writing a story. 
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AshenSnowflakes Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
Aw. =/
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Zylund Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is such a fantastic work of literature n_n Keep up the great work! c:
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Enemom Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Stop looking at my old work this is shit
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Zylund Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This was the first thing I saw in your gallery, I had not noticed it said 2013.

but it good.
I like this piece. a lot.

I'll look at your newer works though~
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Enemom Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. 
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Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013
This is quite lovely. I like the rhythm a lot.
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AlthaeaBuddy Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Great!! The more I see from you, the more impressed I am. :)

The short sentences work very well, conveying your meaning with the use of just a few words, which I think is great.

I'm too lazy to think of any tips for you. It's late, and I really should be in bed. :P

Anyways, you're a great writer. :D
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Enemom Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hey. 

It's been a while. Why don't you check out some more of my works? I have gotten better!
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AlthaeaBuddy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
Okay! :D

I'm sorry I've ignored most of the stuff in my inbox. School's been a pain, and I really haven't had the time.
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Enemom Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, it's fine! That happens to all of us at some point. :)
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lady-deathrose Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How true, you hit the nail on the head with this one. This speaks to me, it tells me who we are. For we are all this, all of us. And it is also a comfort to know. This flows very nicely, I like it. A lot, really!
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Enemom Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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BluSilvrPaladin Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very true and moving work!
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Enemom Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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CosmosKitty Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
:clap:
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Enemom Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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pinktwirlz Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! My name is Madolyn, I am a staff critic for #FreeVersePoetry. Please don't be offended by anything I say, as it is all intended to be constructive. :)

This poem is written really well. I can't find any real flaws with it; it flows quite nicely and the words fit well together. The concept is tried and true but doesn't go as far as to be cliche, which is nice.
All I can think to say about it is nothing really stands out while reading it, so it doesn't leave much of an impact on the reader. I would say the only thing you can improve on it is stylistic things. Let the voice carry through a bit more in the style. For example, if you put periods every two lines instead of commas (like after "looks," "temporary," and "results") it would give it a snappier effect, and leave a greater impression. Of course, this is purely a stylistic opinion of mine and is in no way forced upon you.

All in all, it's a good solid poem with a nice flow and good message. It just isn't really unique in any way. Let your voice come in clearer, and leave a stronger impression of the message you were trying to bring across. Play around with punctuation, line spacing, maybe even bold and italics. You'd be surprised how much of a difference it could make.

Great poem! I really do like it. :nod:
~Madolyn
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Enemom Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My, god, thanks. I'll keep them in mind!
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pinktwirlz Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol you are welcome XD
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Enemom Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!
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aajjmm1 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wonderful! im so glad you gave me a link to this! It truly is wonderful!
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MissMargoStarr11 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
This is truly lovely.
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CookieLuver123 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. You should check out my other one.
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CookieLuver123 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
I did! It's amazing as well!
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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CookieLuver123 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
No problem C:
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princce7 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
amen
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. I'm making another one.
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princce7 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
btw, i found this cause i am fi and aroura's admin.
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
!!!!!!
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princce7 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
you linked it to them, so i saw it with this account.

lol, aroura is not my worst character. dont fear aroura... fear my other ocs XD
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ocs???
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princce7 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
original characters.
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Enemom Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, I love to mess with aruora. I swear, every time I spell her name I get an autocorrect on my IPAD. It's annoying.
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